It is quite right that top sports people should be paid a lot of money. To what extent do you agree?

In the current scenario, the governments are paying more attention to sports which will improve
theprestige
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the prestige
of our country. That's why some people believe that those who are playing games for our nation, have
right
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the right
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to get more money for their performance.
My opinion
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, I partially agree with
this
statement.
Although
, they are eligible for high paid salaries if the administration spends lots of budget on these people
then
it would not have enough money to spend on other important things.
To begin
with, there are numerous factors to consider in my statement.
Firstly
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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