Some People Believe That Reading Stories From A Book Is Better Than Watching TV Or Playing Computer Games For Children. To What Extent Do You Agree Or Disagree?

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When it comes to
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, it is widely believed by
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members that reading stories from a book is more beneficial than watching tv or playing computer games. Personally, I do agree with
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observation.
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hand, it is obvious that sitting in front of a television or computer in long term could affect their imagination and creation as well as their behaviour in an irreversible way. Take,
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, these days, TV program producers or game-making companies tend to replace their educational and age-relevant scenes with inappropriate ones
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as violence which can be attractive to young audiences. The more fictional scenes, the more viewer can
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take.
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, in the future, the rate of crime -which is committed by the generation who had spoiled childhood - and violence will
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.
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, if
children
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expose to watching tv or playing games with high frequency, they are likely to be addicted to these platforms and it may cause of lack of concentration and decrease their study level.
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, reading books on a regular basis
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inevitably can enhance
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’s abilities and vocabulary surfaces. As you may know, books that are designed and planned for
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controlled
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by a specific part of each government
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in charge of assessing their concepts and goals.
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, reading books is like a gym for a brain in which you can shape your mind and strengthen your brain. So
children
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’s parents can help them to gain a higher level of intelligence and enhance their knowledge by reading storybooks for them. To sum it up, considering the various impacts
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reading stories from a book, watching television and playing computer games may have on
children
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, I believe that the
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one is far more advantageous for them and
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activity should be encouraged more widely in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Imagination
  • Visualization
  • Complex vocabulary
  • Sentence structure
  • Focus
  • Concentration
  • Passive activity
  • Interactive activity
  • Gratification
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Cultural perspective
  • Historical perspective
  • Attention span
  • Educational enrichment
  • Cognitive development
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