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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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It is a fact that
technology
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 has influenced how
people
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 interact with other humans. Technological development has affected relationships in different ways, and in my
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 there are numerous positive effects.
Technology
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 has had an impact on relationships in business, education and social life.
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, cellphones or all the devices have the internet allowing business
people
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 in different countries to interact that needn't go to the company.
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, because the Covid-19 pandemic is more and more dangerous, everyone works at home, especially teachers and students, there are numerous services that help them to learn and work in a group
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 as Google Meet, Zoom, Skype, etc.
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, students can now take a video lesson with a teacher in various cities or countries.
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, the social network plays a vital role in daily life. Many
people
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 use social media, like Facebook and Messenger, to make new friends and chat with each other. According to social studies, 90% of citizens use
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social networks like transport to communicate and connect with each other, they can interact through their computers rather than face to face.
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, technological development has been extremely positive. A few years ago, connecting with others over the world was much more difficult when was limited to written letters or telegrams. But nowadays, thanks to the development of
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, interaction via email, phones or social media has been unlimited, and there is a good way to help individuals make new relationships and have success in their job or study. In conclusion,
technology
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 has certainly revolutionised the interaction between
people
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, and these positive effects will be developed in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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