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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the environmental problem is always an important issue in society that many
people
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concern
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.
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about.
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 Some
people
 think that the disappearance of some
species
 of plants and animals is the main
cause
 of environmental problems. In my opinion, I do not agree with
this
 statement. I believe that there are still more urgent issues about the environment. One reason is that
water
 pollution is one of the most obstacles to nature.
Water
 contamination directly affects human health.
For example
, in Africa, especially
people
 living in the slum is rarely had pure
water
 to drink, they are susceptible to diseases caused by dirty
water
such
 as dermatitis, or
diarrhea
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.
People
 can not have a healthy body if they do not have enough clean
water
 to use in their daily life. It might be claimed that the loss of some
species
 of flora and fauna is a major
cause
 of the environmental issue. The complete disappearance of some key
species
 in the natural would link to the loss of
neighboring
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species
.
This
 makes a strong impact on the environment and unbalances the ecosystem.
However
,
this
 argument oversimplifies the issue. In fact, the balance of the ecosystem is seriously affected by many reasons, in which the most significant
cause
 is a
forest
 fire. Fires have turned lush forests into dead lands by cleanly burning plants, and have brutally killed creatures.
In addition
,
Forest
 fires
also
 have long-term effects on the climate. The enormous amount of carbon dioxide released after a fire has contributed to global warming, causing greenhouse effects and climate change. To conclude, the loss of some
species
 of plants and animals is clearly not the main
cause
 of environmental issues.
Such
water
 pollution and
forest
 fire are more alarming problems that impact directly humans.
Therefore
,
forest
 and
water
 protection has never been
urgent
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 than now.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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