Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

an increasingly advanced, and developed society
also
leads to problems affecting the environment due to industrial
waste
, dust from motorbikes, cars, and human
waste
leading to many
environment
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problems
such
as climate change, ozone depletion, marine environment
pollution
, and especially the disappearance of several
plants
and
animals
species important to human life.
Although
I agree it is a serious problem, I still think that our Earth has more than many issues to worry
.
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on the one hand, there are many reasons why
loss
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the loss
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of
animals
and
plants
is a matter of concern today.
first
, it must be mentioned that
people
's awareness and greed for forest protection. some
people
from ethnic minorities are still not aware that it is illegal to cut down
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the forest
a forest
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forest
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forests
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and hunt
animals
.
besides
, some
people
know that but still do to sell for money.
moreover
, climate change, specifically global
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warming
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warning
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warming
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,
also
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a reason
why
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for why
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disappearance
or
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of
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some
plants
and
animals
. Melting ice causes sea levels to rise more and more, causing
tsunami
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tsunamis
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or hot weather, causing wildfires everywhere in the world, which makes it difficult for
animals
to find places to live and
source
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sources
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of food.
on the other hand
,
i
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support the view that there are more pressing environmental issues that need attention; specifically here is
water
pollution
including domestic
water
and seawater, ponds, and rivers. the main cause of
water
pollution
is due to human activities
such
as domestic
waste
, medical
waste
from
people
living near the sea, or rivers that are not treated but directly thrown into the
water
. more toxic is
waste
from factories and enterprises, which not only causes serious
water
pollution
but
also
affects human health. more specifically, may increase the risk of cancers, miscarriages, and birth defects. in summary,
although
the disappearance of
plants
and
animals
species is a serious problem, I still think that there are many environmental issues that are of concern today.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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