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Some people say that the main enviromental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important enviromental problems

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Our Mother Earth is currently facing a lot of environmental problems like global warming, acid rain, air pollution, ozone layer depletion, climate change, and many more that affect every human, animal, and nation on
this
 planet. While I agree that reduced biodiversity is a serious problem, I believe that we are facing more pressing environmental concerns. Those believing that the extinction of various species is the most important problem argue that
such
 loss triggers devastating consequences.
To begin
 with, the number of beneficial plants and insects to crops is declining quickly, which makes crops become more vulnerable to pests and diseases.
For instance
, the disappearance of some bees pollinating fruits’ flowers may decrease the productivity of farms. Another reason is the fact that today wild plants and animals are still principal food sources in many developing countries.
Therefore
, the loss of species will create extreme food insecurity in these areas and affect millions of people, especially those living under the poverty line.
On the other hand
, I support the view that there are more urgent environmental concerns to tackle. One of the main problems could be the pollution of air.
Such
 contamination is created by fumes of vehicles and gases in industrial factories, creating serious health problems for humans
such
 as lung cancer and respiratory diseases.
In addition
, climate change is
also
 creating destructive impacts on human life. More specifically, extreme weather events have become more intense and frequent, like earthquakes in Japan or frequent storms in Vietnam which lead to critical infrastructure damages and casualties. In conclusion,
although
 the reduction of wildlife species is a serious problem, I believe that other major environmental concerns should
also
 be considered.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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