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There are many extinct animal species in the world. Some people think we should protect animals from dying out, while others believe we should spend more time on problems of human beings. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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As evolution takes place
animals
 are evolving as well, and some species die and never resurface the earth again. It is argued that
animals
 should be protected from going into extinction, while some schools of thought believe there are more pressing issues affecting human beings which should be looked after
such
 as jobs and security .In
this
 essay, I will be discussing both views but I am of the opinion that problems associated with humans should be looked into
instead
 of
creatures
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 extinction.
Animals
 are beautiful creatures created for beautiful nature. Due to revolutionary ,theories most of them will die and never exist again.
Although
, the effect of human efforts can help in preventing of extinction of
animals
.
For instance
, if hunters stop going into the forest to hunt wild
animals
 for food it will help in the preservation of
such
animals
such
 as bears, kangaroos etc. The preservation of
animals
also
 helps to build the ecosystem.
On the other hand
,
people
 are facing more pressing issues relating to their survival as living beings. Problems
such
 as job and security are part of the problems associated with
people
.
Instead
 of thinking of
animals
 provision of trade for
people
 to venture into, looking out for
people
 by making the environment safe is of utmost importance.
For example
, a career
such
 as farming can help In the provision of food for the family and the government making sure the environment is safe to live in will greatly increase the living condition of
people
. In conclusion,
although
 humans can contribute to the preservation of
animals
, providing good work and adequate security will be appreciated by
people
 because it solves their immediate and family need.
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