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Many students do not finish school. Why is this, and how can the problem be solved? School Drop-Outs: Problems and Solutions

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 the modern generation of
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 are able to make capital at a young age without acquiring any knowledge, they prefer not to visit academies or universities. While
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 approach of getting dropped out is becoming a more and more problematic culture in our community, there has always been some solutions to overcome these obstacles. There is no doubt that some scholars, do not like to go to the schools for
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, they prefer educating themselves through online means of
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 from the videos on youtube and Facebook. The
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 nowadays start working as teenage to back up their financial support.
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, teenagers are heavily investing their time and money in the world of bitcoins to generate excessive money.
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 online way of making funds rather than going to schools.
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, there is no guarantee that learning being drop-outs and making bills at a very young age will give teenagers a bright future. For
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 need to be at schools or universities where teachers are more focused on their student's future.
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 need to get old traditional
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 in order to back their online abilities to make cash and to get a more secure life.
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 must surround themselves with those people in reality that will give them away to lift up their careers. These are considered to be the best reliable way of overcoming
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 complications of avoiding
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. In conclusion, despite the problems of drop-outs being considerably high in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • drop out
  • completion
  • attendance
  • disengaged
  • disinterested
  • underprivileged
  • financial constraints
  • academic achievement
  • learning difficulties
  • negative peer influences
  • intimidation
  • accessibility
  • supportive environment
  • guidance
  • adolescent pregnancy
  • psychological well-being
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