Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples

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Domestic
animals
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and humans have a long history, that’s why
pets
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are very common these days. Many families adopt dogs and cats because they think it is beneficial for
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others argue that
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decision could lead to harm and lower the kids’ well-being. In my opinion, the pros outweigh the cons of having
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. It is true that there are some risks in living with
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especially in a family with small
children
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since humans and
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are completely different. Some owners might not know enough about
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pets
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’ behaviours which can lead to various negative effects.
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, being out of hand or even uncontrollable in some situations, being a host to parasites that
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affect the family’s members without anyone noticing, and even harm from
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’ toys.
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, parents need to take extra care and that can be
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and stressful for the family. Aside from all the risks, dogs and cats can be helpful for kids as well. Many households
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familiar with
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for a long time,
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, they can understand their
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and can raise
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to understand them too.
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who grew up with
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are proved to be more merciful and gentle from many studies.
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,
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can save kids from many fatal situations. There are many videos on YouTube as evidence of
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.
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, a clip of a small dog chasing the bad people away from a child, and a clip of a cat closing the door to prevent a baby from crawling downstairs. In conclusion,
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there can still be some harm from owning
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, the benefits of
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are more impacted. For the reasons discussed, I support
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in the family since they can have more advantages with the right care.
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Well done in addressing both sides of the argument effectively. Make sure to demonstrate a clear position in your introduction for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical flow and the arguments are well-supported. Try to strengthen the link between paragraphs by using more transition words for smoother coherence and cohesion.
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Balanced discussion of both sides of the argument
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Strong examples provided to support the points made
coherence and cohesion
Clear structure with well-developed arguments
Topic Vocabulary:
  • companion
  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
  • diseases
  • allergies
  • safety risks
  • time
  • effort
  • money
  • mature
  • handle
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