Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples
Domestic
animals
and humans have a long history, that’s why pets
are very common these days. Many families adopt dogs and cats because they think it is beneficial for children
while
others argue that this
decision could lead to harm and lower the kids’ well-being. In my opinion, the pros outweigh the cons of having pets
.
It is true that there are some risks in living with pets
especially in a family with small children
since humans and animals
are completely different. Some owners might not know enough about the
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their
pets
’ behaviours which can lead to various negative effects. For example
, being out of hand or even uncontrollable in some situations, being a host to parasites that also
affect the family’s members without anyone noticing, and even harm from pets
’ toys. Moreover
, parents need to take extra care and that can be time consuming
and stressful for the family.
Aside from all the risks, dogs and cats can be helpful for kids as well. Many households Add a hyphen
time-consuming
are
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have been
pets
for a long time, therefore
, they can understand their pets
and can raise children
to understand them too. Children
who grew up with animals
are proved to be more merciful and gentle from many studies. Moreover
, pets
can save kids from many fatal situations. There are many videos on YouTube as evidence of this
. For instance
, a clip of a small dog chasing the bad people away from a child, and a clip of a cat closing the door to prevent a baby from crawling downstairs.
In conclusion, although
there can still be some harm from owning animals
, the benefits of pets
are more impacted. For the reasons discussed, I support pets
in the family since they can have more advantages with the right care.Submitted by nui.hscz on
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Well done in addressing both sides of the argument effectively. Make sure to demonstrate a clear position in your introduction for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical flow and the arguments are well-supported. Try to strengthen the link between paragraphs by using more transition words for smoother coherence and cohesion.
task response
Balanced discussion of both sides of the argument
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Strong examples provided to support the points made
coherence and cohesion
Clear structure with well-developed arguments
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