More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solution can you offer?
Cities
always
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have always
were
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been
atractive
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attractive
for
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to
community
since it offers more opportunities for career, education and recreation. Add an article
the community
Moreover
, all people
chasing
for having Wrong verb form
chase
comfortable
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a comfortable
life
in cities
because it offers more options for spending weekends along with dedicating yourself in
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to
sport
activities. It is true that most Change the noun form
sports
of
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apply
farmers
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the farmers
leaving
their Wrong verb form
leave
business
and rural homeland Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
to
urban Change preposition
for
areas
for searching more opportunities for job
. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
This
essay will discuss which outcomes this
will bring and which solutions
can be suggested.
Firstly
, the number of people
being increased in cities
due to movement from rural areas
would lead to increasment
of competition in Correct your spelling
increased
increase
increasing
cities
. For
instance
, even drivers and sellers can not find jobs on
our hometown due to Change preposition
in
monthly
migration of individuals from Correct article usage
the monthly
rural
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a rural
the rural
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
This
causes tensions amd
anxiety among Correct your spelling
and
people
accommodated on
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in
cities
so that the city life
becomes more pressurised and tensMoreover , the rural areas
is
being left without farmers who can supply the local community with good quality Change the verb form
are
products
. Secondly
, as agriculture is one of the main sector
for food supply in the final Change to a plural noun
sectors
market place
, it is preferably to have more Agricultural Correct your spelling
marketplace
products
in groceries since due to plenty of Vega tables and fruits the prices for them won't be extremely expensive. For
instance
, no competition among agricultural products
leads to high -priced
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high-priced
products
in agricultural
sector. Add an article
the agricultural
This
would cause not everyone to afford buying
vitamins and healthy nutrition coming from plants.So, competition for Change the verb form
to buy
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the job
job
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jobs
is
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in
cities
, decreasing of
agricultural Change preposition
apply
products
in market
place and costly vegetables and fruits could be the consequences Add an article
the market
from
Change preposition
of
movement
of Add an article
the movement
people
with agricultural experience to urban areas
.
Solutions
such
as creating social
package for Add an article
a social
pharmers
would be Correct your spelling
farmers
the
one Change the article
apply
of
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apply
solutions
. Exactly saying ,providing the accommodation and transportation by the government, paid annual vacation , medical insurance and holiday money bonus would be attractive for Pharmers
so no one furtherly would tend to leave their agricultural lifestyle. Correct your spelling
Farmers
For
instance
, if the Correct your spelling
farmers
pharmers'
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pharmers
lives
in rural Correct subject-verb agreement
live
areas
as much as comfortable and luxurious as some' s in Add a verb
areareas
wereareas
cities
so it will be option
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an option
the option
for
not Change preposition
apply
leaving
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to leave
cities
in search for
job opportunities. So, Change preposition
of
materialistic
and financial aspects of agricultural individuals should be improved and supported by the state authority in order to prevent migration to Correct article usage
the materialistic
cities
. Moreover
, rural areas
should be funded by Correct your spelling
state
sate
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state
authority
to create comfort for humankind . Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
For
instance
, if the rural living conditions is
comfortable as Change the verb form
are
much
as in Correct quantifier usage
apply
cities
by such
as high -speed
internet , good cell phone network, conducted water system and heat system in every Correct your spelling
high-speed
homes
, Change to a singular noun
home
kindergartens
and Fix the agreement mistake
kindergarten
schools
for children , Fix the agreement mistake
school
them
nobody would be eager to leave their homes in agricultural Correct pronoun usage
apply
cointryside
.So, providing social package and Correct your spelling
countryside
improvement
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improving
life
conditions for agricultural pharmers
would be motivation and inspiration not to move to Correct your spelling
farmers
cities
in search for
work.
Change preposition
of
Thus
, cities
are always thought to be good for living because it offers more
comfortable Correct article usage
a more
life
as it is to be thought by the
society. More and more Correct article usage
apply
people
moving to cities
by leaving their agricultural background so this
causes high competion
in Correct your spelling
competition
cities
for jobs and less natural agricultural products
in grocery stocks and marketplaces. Solutions
such
as improving of
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apply
financial
status of Add an article
the financial
pharmers
by supplying social Correct your spelling
farmers
package
and creating comfortable conditions in their home places would be demotivation for Fix the agreement mistake
packages
agricultural
Add an article
an agricultural
the agricultural
professional
to move to urban Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
areas
. If all life
demands and level of comfort is satisfied in not urban locations so everyone would eager to stay and live there.Submitted by zhadym on
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Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general