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What are the causes of water shortage? How should the natural resources be preserved and utilized.

#water #shortage #resources
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The
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 of
water
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 shortage which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is hazardous while others reject
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 notion. The substantial influence of
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 trend has sparked
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controversy over
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 potential impact in recent years. In my opinion, the shortage of
water
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 as a natural resource is a great
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. There are myriad
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reasons which will
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 explain
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 argument but the most preponderance stems from the fact is that overpopulation leads to migration and urbanisation which result in creating imbalance and scarcity of resources. Another pivotal aspect is that
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 of pollution causes global warming which leads
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 disasters like floods,
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and drought
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 and under
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 conditions there is no
water
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.
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, it is apparent that
water
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 shortage is a global threat. Steps to deal with
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problem
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 are many but
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 significant ones are not complicated but acceptable and practical.
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, there should be recycling of
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 and even
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water
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 harvesting is very helpful in storing fresh
water
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. Primarily, afforestation reduces pollution and maintains
water
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 cycles.
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, strict laws should be made against pollution. To recapitulate, according to the arguments aforementioned above, one can reach
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a conclusion that the
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 of
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water
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the water
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 crisis can be successfully addressed, provided that the
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 measures are taken.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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