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Globalization is positive for economies but its negative sides should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are numerous beneficial factors that globalization may contribute to a high economic
status
 of a country
however
 its drawbacks must not be neglected. I firmly believe that it will have a great impact on economic development and I will give my support in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, the gathering of different countries at Dubai expo 2020 brought spectacular merit to their economy
such
 as in the livelihood industries of the citizen.
For instance
, those locally made products will be introduced to different visitors and absolutely they will purchase them for the sake of souvenirs. In
this
 way, the people of Dubai will obtain high revenue and it will help its economic
status
.
However
, the congestion of tourists might be a contributory factor in the easy transmission of upper respiratory infections like flu, but the health institution of Dubai will adhere to effective handwashing for the people to prevent the transmission of viral infection.
Thus
, the positive effect on its economic
status
 will not hinder the health of the public.
On the other hand
, globalization
also
 attracts people globally to explore a specific country.
Such
 as in Japan, where the previous Olympics were held; most Japanese give information about different tourist destinations to all the visitors coming from different continents of the world. In
such
 a way,
this
 will make the tourism industry procure a high-income tax return from all the visitors. Even though high waste products will arise due to the high impact of tourists, still their government were implementing numerous signage in every corner of the tourist spot in throwing their garbages properly in
such
 a way that surroundings cleanliness will be maintained.
Hence
, Japan will get a high income for the tourism industry as well as maintain the beauty of nature. In summary, all different gatherings of individuals to a specific country that would give a high revenue to their economic
status
 is a great help to all, without ruining the mother earth as well as the health of the public by giving a huge emphasis on it as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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