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Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's modern world, there is probably greater access to
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 than ever before.
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, the function of
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 remains an area of debate with some believing that it provides meaning and purpose to our lives, whilst others feel that it is only a momentary escape from more important issues. My own belief is that
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 is fundamental to what makes us human. A
first
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 point to consider is that the expression of our lives through
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 is one of the few things that separates humans from animals. Man is the only creature who attempts to reflect
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 own life through
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 forms
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 as painting.
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, the fact that
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 is often taken to mean the work of geniuses
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 as Picasso does not necessarily mean that
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 is only a characteristic of modern man. Ancient cave paintings show that even in primitive times, the expression of the world around was important to humans. In my
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this
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 is a strong argument for showing how vital
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 is to Man. Some
people
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 believe that
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 is just a brief distraction from normality.
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, one of the major uses of
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 is to lift
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's spirits. The songs of slaves provide an example of how music can help
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 cope with pain.
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, paintings and sculptures are often used to remember historical events, keeping them alive in the culture. I believe
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 reflects a fundamental need to express our existence through
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. To summarize,
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 is something
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 has been a part of human history for thousands of years and helps
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 survive difficult times and express their existence.
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, it is my view that
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 is much more than just entertainment: it is one of the defining characteristics of being human.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • cathartic
  • cultural tapestry
  • expressionism
  • fleeting
  • introspection
  • monetary value
  • nostalgia
  • profound impact
  • socioeconomic
  • subjective perspective
  • visceral response
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