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Some people say that when on holiday in a foreign country, the best way to get to know the people and their country is by staying in a hotel. What is your opinion about this?

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Some percentages of
people
 believe that during the holidays overseas, the suitable method to learn about the native
people
 and their nation is through living in a motel. In my point of view, it is a good idea to stay in a lodge to get
information
 about the particular country and the residents.
However
, staying with
friends
 and relatives would be helpful too. In today’s world
traveling
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 to different countries and discovering the history, culture, religion, geography, and so on is a common passion among the
people
.
Travelers
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 think that they can get many more
information
 through the hotel staff, so
people
 love to live in a lodge. Tourists not only get
information
 from the motel, but
also
 they can enjoy the services and facilities provided by the hotel.
Furthermore
, the hotel can
also
 provide a local tour guide that can help tourists to travel and know about the history and culture of the particular nation.
People
 say it is always useful to have stayed in a motel and have a tour guide to communicate with the local
people
.
Although
, it can be beneficial to live with
friends
 and relatives, as we will be more comfortable with them and they can be a good guide for us.
Similarly
,
people
 can get a chance to engage with their old
friends
 and family after a long period.
In addition
,
friends
 can
also
 be part of our tour which can be more interesting and can add more fun to a journey. In conclusion, hotels can be a good source of
information
 about a particular nation, since motels have lots of services and facilities for the tourist.
However
, sometimes staying with relatives and
friends
 could be more useful.
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