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There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home. This is because computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The world is going to advance every day today. Because of the Innovation of new Technology, It's very easy to get their degree as well as they can work from home by simply using a computer. Though some
people
 think that, it is negative for personal life I strongly believe that it is good for most of the country. There are abundant reasons to support my viewpoint.
Firstly
, It is time-consuming. If
people
 need to go to their
office
 they must have to suffer a lot because of traffic jams. It not only kills their valuable time but is
also
 costly for the sake of transportation. whenever
people
 are attasted with home
office
people
 don't need to travel from here to there. Which causes
lots
 of expansion in coal and fuel. It increases the carbon-di-oxide in nature which is the root of many diseases. Apart from
this
, Sometimes going to the
office
 and maintaining the same officiality is hackneyed. By maintaining a proper schedule
office
 from their residence they can save
lots
 of extra expenditure. An employee can get
lots
 of time with their family. Which sometimes mitigates
lots
 of crime.
In addition
, to above mentioned positive ramifications on working employees, there are huge positive consequences on students
also
. They can do
lots
 of extra activities as they don't need to present in
a
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 institution. Sometimes whenever they are in school they waste their time by doing gossip or mixing with peccant
people
 which is the cause for endangering their future. In conclusion, even though studying and working from home seems not interesting, it has numerous positive effects on physical and mental health which cannot be ignored.
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