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In the future, nobody will buy printed nespapers and books because thay will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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It is often argued that
one day
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 non-person will purchase printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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 since they will read everything they need online for free.
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 statement is seemingly logical,
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however
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 I totally disagree with it. In the following
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 I intend to delve into the supporting points of
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 issue and write my attitude toward it.
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 of all, I believe that printed
books
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, magazines and etc
gives
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 people
sense
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 of cosiness and comfort that no electronic book or file can guarantee. Even if someone reads
very
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 interesting book online,
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 person can not fully concentrate on
book
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the book
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. One clear example
are
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 famous writers, most of them read and write on paper
,
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 because it is the most capable mothed to express your ideas. That’s why it is more comfortable to use paper than
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. The
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 main reason why printed production will not disappear is the fact that reading from
phone
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the phone
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, computer or electronic
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books
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book
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have
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 a bad effect on our health.
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, your eyes
suffers
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 from the screen of your phone or computer.
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, according to
the
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scientist
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 it can easily induce difficult eyes illnesses.
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, it is necessary to take into account all the details of each individual case. To put it in nutshell, I pen down saying that reading printed
books
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 is more beneficial than the electronic approach because it is more comfortable and better for our health.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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