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In the future, nobody will buy printed nespapers and books because thay will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #nespapers #books #thay
It is often argued that
one day
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 non-person will purchase printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
 since they will read everything they need online for free.
This
 statement is seemingly logical,
however
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 I totally disagree with it. In the following
paragraphs
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 I intend to delve into the supporting points of
this
 issue and write my attitude toward it.
First
 of all, I believe that printed
books
, magazines and etc
gives
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 people
sense
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 of cosiness and comfort that no electronic book or file can guarantee. Even if someone reads
very
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 interesting book online,
this
 person can not fully concentrate on
book
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the book
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. One clear example
are
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 famous writers, most of them read and write on paper
,
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 because it is the most capable mothed to express your ideas. That’s why it is more comfortable to use paper than
screen
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. The
second
 main reason why printed production will not disappear is the fact that reading from
phone
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the phone
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, computer or electronic
books
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have
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 a bad effect on our health.
In other words
, your eyes
suffers
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 from the screen of your phone or computer.
Moreover
, according to
the
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scientist
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 it can easily induce difficult eyes illnesses.
Nevertheless
, it is necessary to take into account all the details of each individual case. To put it in nutshell, I pen down saying that reading printed
books
 is more beneficial than the electronic approach because it is more comfortable and better for our health.
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