Today children are spending much more time watching TV compared to the past. Why do you think this happens? Is this a positive or a negative change?

Now a day a lot of young
people
like to see the
tv
compared to the old generation. In my ,opinion I think
this
is a negative impact on the new generation. In
this
,easy we will explain the reason why it is a negative change in three points.
First
of all, I think
children
today are more focused on
tv
or computing because the
Parten
allow
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them. If the family have a strict decision on the
children
about the time they spent on the screen it will not be a negative change.
For example
, the
children
under the age of 3 years don’t have to see the
tv
as it is
the
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bad impact on them.
Second
, being less active
in
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the family member with the
children
make the child see the screen more. ,
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the
Parten
should spend more time with the young
people
.
For example
, I go outside with my daughter at the weekend when she has free, do
a
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oflot activity with her and she is not interested in
tv
at all.
Third
, society
also
doesn’t have an impact on
children
to help them to avoid seeing the
tv
a lot. Society must do
a
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an
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oflot activity for young
people
to help
Parten
. To conclude, give the
children
more attention in their lives they will forget to watch the
tv
a lot. As I said there are three reasons why young
people
watch
tv
more than in the past.
First
Parten
allows them, less active with their family member, and society.
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  • screen time
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • educational content
  • entertainment
  • relaxation
  • physical activity
  • cultural exposure
  • mental health
  • visual skills
  • auditory skills
  • advertisements
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