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Some people think that children under 18 years old should receive full-time education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some would argue that
students
 who are below 18 years of age should get
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time
 teaching. I completely disagree with the given statement because apart from
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, they
also
 need to
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 in extracurricular activities as well as practical
knowledge
also
 equally
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 a
curicial
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crucial
critical
 role. On the one hand, learning
theoritical
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theoretical
knowledge
 by staying in a school
whole
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 day prevents
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 from
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learning
leading
 other activities like sports, art, music etc. Each of the
students
have
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 their unique abilities as some may be good in academics whilst
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 may be good in art.
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student
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students
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 just in
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theoretical
knowlegde
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knowledge
 could shed the hidden extra skills of the pupils. To cite an example,
majority
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 of
students
 in developing countries realized their true inborn extra skill after they graduate from high school which they realize
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being late and worry to waste of other more years in mastering that because of
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theoretical
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time
 education system in
thier
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their
 curriculum.
On the other hand
, practical
knowledge
 should
instill
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 in them since their childhood along with book
knowledge
 because only
then
 they will be able to
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comprehend
 their education effectively. Studying full
time
 with just books
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 help in developing social skills. In order to gain it,
individual
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individuals
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 have to go to the community and
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execute
 their theory. For an instance, in
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the social
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 the student
learn
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 about
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the importance
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 of afforestation but when they actually are assigned to do the afforestation program
then
 their
knowledge
 becomes crystal clear with the process of doing it, dealing with the people, and giving
knowledge
 about
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 importance and
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preserves
. In conclusion,
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time
 education for
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young
students
 will make them bookworms.
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 they should be allowed to participate in extra-curricular activities and practical
knowledge
 so that they can
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sharp
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share
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 their skills.
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