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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction.What measures could be taken to prevent this.

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During the industrialization and construction period, many developing countries face issues with
water
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 and air pollution.
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 there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of
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 trend, solutions can be taken to mitigate these potential
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. There are several
problems
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 related to
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 trend. The main issue is there will
have
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 more people who get diseases as they have to live in areas with low air quality and use unclean
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 resources. The rate of people getting cancer or gastrointestinal disease increases
high
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apply
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. Citizens with poor health affect the nation's economy and the government will
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 be under more pressure on healthcare. Another problem is environmental pollution. There would be a rise in natural disasters
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 as floods and droughts because of extinct species and an imbalance in biodiversity.
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,
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 causes the earth to become hotter, affects the global climate and leads to melting ice at two Poles.
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, several actions could be taken to solve the
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 mentioned above.
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, manufacturing companies need to build industrial waste systems. All acts of discharging into the natural environment should be strictly prohibited and punished. These systems will reduce the amount of industrial wastewater entering people's domestic
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.
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, the government should enact awareness-raising policies for businesses,
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, constructing industrial parks far from residential areas in order to restrict direct harm emissions.
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, the nations should encourage the use of solar
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 and renewable
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 in manufacturing and construction. Clean
energy
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 not only saves
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 but is
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 safe for workers. In conclusion, various measures can be implemented to tackle the
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 that are certain to arise as the environment of developing countries
grow
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grows
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 poor air and
water
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 quality.
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Provide more specific examples and data to support your points. Make sure all ideas are fully developed and directly relevant to the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clearer structure by using transition words to connect ideas and paragraphs. Expand on your ideas in each paragraph to enhance coherence and cohesion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution control regulations
  • emissions
  • discharges
  • green technology incentives
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable materials
  • waste management policies
  • recycling processes
  • environmental monitoring
  • compliance with environmental standards
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental protection
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • modern building techniques
  • international environmental organizations
  • air and water quality management
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