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Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
people
 have more and more attention to
children
’s personal development. As for their chances to make
mistakes
. Different
people
 hold different opinions. there are certainly many
people
 who show a preference to protect
children
 in almost every aspect to prevent them from making
mistakes
, but there are still many who see the value in fostering
children
’s ability to fail. It is easy to argue that
children
 need guidance to be protected from struggling and making
mistakes
. In today’s society, every family always only has one child who is the centre of the whole family, parents and even grandparents are tempted to shield
children
 from failures. what I am saying is that
children
 are spoiled and protected in a very comfortable zone in which everything is arranged and guided or controlled by adults. from the school they will attend to the way they respond to their friends or teachers, they are like the puppets without thinking ability.
therefore
, they certainly do not have the opportunity to make any
mistakes
 in their lives.
However
, it would be a mistake to think that everyone thinks
this
 way. Many
people
 hold the opposite view that
children
 are allowed and even encouraged to make
mistakes
.
for example
, if a child fights with his friend, it gives him a chance to learn the correct way to deal with problems in interacting with
people
. what parents should do is guide him and ask him how he feels about the issue and how he will react to
this
 kind of trouble
next
 time. Through
this
 process,
children
 begin to develop social and emotional skills which could help them learn how to manage their emotions and reflect on a different voice from their own. It is expected that they will grow into adults who have a better self-confidence to make their decisions and learn to compromise sometimes. My own opinion is that there is truth in both views.there are certainly
people
 to focus on a safe growing environment for
children
.
on the other hand
, there are many who prefer to value the opportunities
children
 meet failures. I would say that I belong more to
this
second
 group,
although
 I would say support and guidance are necessary from caretakers to help
children
 grow
helthyly
Correct your spelling
healthily
healthy
. .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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