Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays
people
have more and more attention to
children
’s personal development. As for their chances to make
mistakes
. Different
people
hold different opinions. there are certainly many
people
who show a preference to protect
children
in almost every aspect to prevent them from making
mistakes
, but there are still many who see the value in fostering
children
’s ability to fail. It is easy to argue that
children
need guidance to be protected from struggling and making
mistakes
. In today’s society, every family always only has one child who is the centre of the whole family, parents and even grandparents are tempted to shield
children
from failures. what I am saying is that
children
are spoiled and protected in a very comfortable zone in which everything is arranged and guided or controlled by adults. from the school they will attend to the way they respond to their friends or teachers, they are like the puppets without thinking ability.
therefore
, they certainly do not have the opportunity to make any
mistakes
in their lives.
However
, it would be a mistake to think that everyone thinks
this
way. Many
people
hold the opposite view that
children
are allowed and even encouraged to make
mistakes
.
for example
, if a child fights with his friend, it gives him a chance to learn the correct way to deal with problems in interacting with
people
. what parents should do is guide him and ask him how he feels about the issue and how he will react to
this
kind of trouble
next
time. Through
this
process,
children
begin to develop social and emotional skills which could help them learn how to manage their emotions and reflect on a different voice from their own. It is expected that they will grow into adults who have a better self-confidence to make their decisions and learn to compromise sometimes. My own opinion is that there is truth in both views.there are certainly
people
to focus on a safe growing environment for
children
.
on the other hand
, there are many who prefer to value the opportunities
children
meet failures. I would say that I belong more to
this
second
group,
although
I would say support and guidance are necessary from caretakers to help
children
grow
helthyly
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healthily
healthy
. .
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Example:

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