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Schools have limited amount of money to spend.some people suggest that it should be sent on good teachers, while others say it should be spent for buying equipment like computers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The budget of
schools
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 limits
services
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 that they can provide for pupils. While some people are promoting the idea that
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 money should be spent to hire better instructors, others consider educational
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equipment
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 far more important. I am convinced that there are certain
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 that good teachers are essential;
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, other
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 can not be learned without proper equipment. The ones who advocate good educators have some valid points.
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 in Iran, they took the example of
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 highschools like Aboureyhan or NODET
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 actually do not have developed equipment but are very successful in preparing
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 to get approved in the best universities in town.
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 that, even
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 that are
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equipped
 with proper devices should have good teachers to educate pupils
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 means of using them.
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, many
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 like mathematics and science usually do not need special equipment to be learnt, the ones that the
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 of those
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 are good at and often accepted in. Despite the above, doing experiments by using instruments has always been viewed as the best way of understanding
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 profoundly. The reason for
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 is the failure of
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theoretical
 lessons to figure out each student's weaknesses before putting them into
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practice.
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,
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 can not learn
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 with computer programs, like Word or Powerpoint, without
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 them on computers. To exemplify
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further
, for a pupil to perceive the effects of chemicals on
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each other
, they should examine these effects
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 laboratories using instruments.
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, people believe that providing necessary devices for
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 to examine their
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knowledge
 is vital for
schools
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. In conclusion, one can say good teachers are very important in certain
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 like mathematics and medicine and it is impossible to learn them without experienced educators.
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, if it comes to
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 like computers and chemistry,
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 instruments are far more critical.
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, I would say that it all depends on the subject being taught.
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