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Weddings are gretting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

#weddings #reason #development
These days
people
 are in charge to hold crowded ceremonies as much as they can which cause them to spend
the
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vast amounts of money. In
this
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 that and whether it is an advantageous or disadvantageous phenomenon in our culture. Unfortunately,
marriage
 has turned into a serious topic for families and their young adults due to so many
customes
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customers
 and their expenses which force
people
 to face severe financial troubles.
Mosly
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Mostly
 it is rooted in our historical assumptions which have been laid down and performed for many years that they have been added one after another rather than be removed or lightened.
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 it must be considered that
social
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 and economical circumstances of the society
is
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 totally different from
one
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 existed in past years.
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, in the past
years
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 the majority of wedding gatherings were held in personal houses
wherease
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whereas
 today it is not possible due to the size of them which has been changed to small.
Subsequently
,
people
have
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 not any solution except for referring to public halls and would be racked up large bills. In my opinion, it can be
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 that because of financial crisis poor
people
 are not able to implement these arrangements which
results
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 in
decrease
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of
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marriage
 stats
therefore
, we observe
many
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 severe depression among young
people
 inevitably.
For example
, a young daughter or son of a family who is
graduted
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graduated
 from university with the hope of successful
marriage
 must stay single and
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 to get married and watch loads of
illiterated
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illiterate
illiterates
 ones who are married just because of their prosperity. In conclusion, concentrating on wedding ceremonies and how to carry out them, makes us
to
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be moved far from many vital principles impacting mutual relationships of couples and focus on nonsenses.
As a result
,
people
 must determine
their
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 customs or plan that are going to perform based on and narrow down them as many as possible to ease
marriage
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 procedure.
This
 would be accompanied by
increase
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 in
marriage
 stats
instead
 of depression stats.
Furthermore
 for a young couple economical properties of his or her spouse would not be as
first
 priority.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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