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household changes in cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989

#household #changes #cities #house #prices
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prices
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5 different cities
such
 as New York Martin Reid Tokyo Frankfurt and
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London
 .from 1990 to 2002 that it compared with 1989. Categorically speaking ,as it can be clearly seen,
London
 had a dramatic
increase
 from 1990 to 2002.But Frankfurt had a mild
increase
 in comper
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 other cities. Toky and
London
 were the same and they were about -7
percentage
change
 from 1989
prices
 between 1990 and 1995.But between 1996 and 2002
London
 had
sharp
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increase
 and it reached
to
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about 11
percentage
change
 from 1989
prices
.
However
,Tokyo had a sequential
increase
 and it reached to -5
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 1989
prices
. New York and Madrid were -5 and 2
percentage
change
 from 1988
prices
 respectively from 1990 to 1995.Between 1996 and 2002,New York had a quick
increase
 and it reached
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5
percent
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.
However
,Madrid increased sequentially and It reached
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about 4
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, Frankfort was different in comper
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.Between 1990 and 1995 it was about 4percent.But from 1996 to 2002 it had a tedious decrease and it reached
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3
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