Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, with the detrimental effects modern technology brings to
cities
like pollution and noise , there are certainly many
people
holding the view that it is not healthy to live in big
cities
. From where I stand,
this
is worth thinking
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issue, while we can not deny the benefits big
cities
bring to our life. On one hand, I agree that there
is
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many problems caused by big
cities
. The
first
thing that pumps to my mind is the severe pollution.
For example
, there are overloaded autos in Beijing which is the
first
band city and the capital
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China. A great amount of carbon dioxide emits into the air because of the heavy
trafic
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traffic
which leads to more and more smog. A thin kind of air
condition
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would definitely harm
people
's physical
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health
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heath
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health
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. what's more, unexpected population growth threatens the employment rate and heavy financial conditions
to
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the government.
Therefore
, the unemployed
people
may suffer mental health problems and money allocated to the hospital would probably be reduced.
As a result
,
people
may face more and more problems
of
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keeping healthy and curing their illnesses if they are sick.
On the other hand
, big
cities
mean more opportunities for a better living for
people
. what I am saying is that, if
people
live in a place that can provide a better education situation, they are more likely to become well-rounded individuals who can contribute more to society. If there are more highly educated citizens in a city, it is more likely that there are more chances for
people
to carry out scientific research and more advanced methods would be found to improve living conditions for
people
.
therefore
, new drugs and advanced medical treatments would be implemented which can help human beings have
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better health. To put things in a nutshell. I think the big
cities
effect is like a two-sided sword. Our concerns would cover traffic and air pollution which would
harmed
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people
.
however
, at the same time, we should admit that big
cities
also
bring a bright side for us in terms of health.
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