Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It’s easier to prevent than to cure.
However
, executive representatives of the governing body globally put expenses on curing disorders firsthand and not sufficient on health
education and impediment of the diseases. I totally agree with this
statement and in body paragraphs
I’ll explain my take on Add a comma
,paragraphs
this
.
To begin
with, education is a tool that is
essential in people’s life. It gives us an opportunity to impede a lot of bad consequences of everything. And while government
is busy wasting money on Add an article
the government
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illnesses
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mistreating
health
education we’ll see a society that keeps on consuming fast food and is unaware of elementary skills realted
to Correct your spelling
related
health
. But this
can be figured out due to health
-promoting ads that encourage healthy lifestyles and hinder unhealthy patterns such
as obesity. This
is one way to have a well-brought-up society and it will gradually result in less
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fewer
ilnesses
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illnesses
need
to waste money on them. They say that demand creates supply, but I guess it’s vice versa. If we are represented with Correct article usage
a need
low quality
products we will consume that. So the government is better to start taking care Add a hyphen
low-quality
on
increasing supply, in Change preposition
of
this
case
the demand will be of high quality.
When it comes to Add the comma(s)
,case
health
issues such
as AIDS, Hepatitis C virus and a lot
other ones, we again notice the lack of information among people. Add the preposition
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Although
a lot of NGOs take care of preventing these issues organizing
workshops or study sessions in schools, the government should Change preposition
by organizing
also
be actively involved in this
.
To sum up, there are plenty of ways to do so that the number of illnesses will decrease and people will become more self-aware. Thus
first
and foremost problem to be solved will become teaching people properly.Submitted by Sofia-Haykuhi on
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