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Marketers should not be allowed to target children in their advertisement. Would you agree or disagree with this statement?

#marketers #target #children #advertisement
Nowadays, the most interesting
things
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of
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 human life is a new thing that was developed to an efficient and comfortable that apply
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 each characteristic of people. Certainly, in marketing work
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the craftsmanship of marketers have many offering that
customer
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 can choose and they need to use
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 to get a better choice. Most importantly we should not overlook
children
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demand
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. From my perspective, I totally disagree with that statement. Undoubtedly, many people think they should not be allowed to target
children
 because they do not have an experience and some content do not appropriate
with
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 their young age. They do not be aware
in
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tricky
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 of marketing and can believe easily about
interesting
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invitation
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. They cannot
affordable
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 in
an
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expensive merchandise.
However
,
although
 younger kids do not have an experience as much as mature
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for me, they have a lot of imagination that make them
to
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grow up so,
adult
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 should not intercept student learning. Actually, the most unexpected that some mature never know is
children
 is the main key to
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 their
parents
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decision
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 to purchase goods or service. In conclusion, some people believe that they should not make
an
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advertising
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for
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children
 because of their younger age and they cannot
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 for merchandise or service. Especially, their responsibility is not much to make
decision
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 while I disagree about that content and think they should give an
occasionally
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 to make
children
’s imagination grow. Certainly,
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an adult
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adult
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 can illustrate a wonderful thing or it can be learning material for kids.
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