successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
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people
are very fond of watching Use synonyms
different
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a different
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
sports
games ; Use synonyms
therefore
, a successful Linking Words
sports
player earns a huge amount of money as compared to other significant Use synonyms
professions
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doctors, nurses, military, and many more. A section of society opines that they deserve to get Remove the comma
apply
large
amount of money for their hard Change the article
a large
work
; Use synonyms
however
, some Linking Words
people
believe that it is not justified Use synonyms
with
other Change preposition
by
professionals
. I personally agree with Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the later
later
view, and the following paragraphs will be discussed both views along with suitable examples.
To commence with, many Correct your spelling
latter
people
think that Use synonyms
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apply
sports
Use synonyms
professionals
do a lot of struggle and hard Use synonyms
work
to achieve their positions and they do Use synonyms
number
of sacrifices to become popular. Change the article
a number
the number
Besides
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, players are the role model Linking Words
of
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for
new
generation, and they set good examples in front of Correct article usage
the new
people
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
get motivated to see them, and they Use synonyms
also
try to achieve Linking Words
good
physique like their Add an article
a good
favorite
sportsperson and quit wrong habits. Change the spelling
favourite
For example
, a report from Time Now in 2018, stated that the craze Linking Words
of
Cricket in India Change preposition
for
increasing
day by day Add a missing verb
is increasing
as a result
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model
and Fix the agreement mistake
models
give
more emphasis on their physical health and they avoid harmful substances Wrong verb form
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such
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drugs and alcohol. Remove the comma
apply
Hence
, these players really deserve more amount as Linking Words
a
income according to Correct article usage
apply
few
individuals.
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a few
this
is injustice Linking Words
with
other crucial Change preposition
to
professions
as they Use synonyms
also
give their 100% in their fields. Linking Words
For instance
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corona
pandemic 2019, there were all medical workers who did a lot of hard Correct article usage
the corona
work
and due to their courage and dedication number of Use synonyms
people
could survive. Use synonyms
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Also
they Add a comma
,Also
work
24 hours and unfortunately many medical staff Use synonyms
were died
in Change to the active voice
died
have died
this
rescue operation. Linking Words
Similarly
, Linking Words
military
and police are Correct article usage
the military
also
very important for the safety of Linking Words
country
so they Correct article usage
the country
also
should be considered Linking Words
as
a major profession in terms of salary. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, there are Linking Words
also
numerous Linking Words
professions
that deserve equality.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
although
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apply
sports
Use synonyms
professionals
are very hard working, other Use synonyms
professionals
should not be ignored. In simple Use synonyms
Fix the agreement mistake
words
word
we can Add a comma
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imaging
a nation without Change the verb form
image
be imaging
a
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apply
sports
Use synonyms
professionals
for one Use synonyms
second
, but we can not Linking Words
imaging
it without military force, medical Correct your spelling
imagine
staffs
, leaders and many more. Fix the agreement mistake
staff
Hence
, there should be equality in all Linking Words
professions
.Use synonyms
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