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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Since
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perspective
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perspectives
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have
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 become more valuable, the number of
students
 choosing to study abroad is rising. Both advantages and disadvantages should be discussed. One major benefit is that studying abroad in another country
which
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 has a different
language
 can improve one’s writing and listening skills.
For example
,
students
 have to be familiar with
native
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language
;
otherwise
, they may not able to receive the knowledge. As soon as
students
 master a particular
language
, they may have more promising prospects to be employed by multi-international companies. Another benefit is that studying in
other country
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another country
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 can increase
students
’
horizon
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horizons
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. Experiencing another culture can help them to consider
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are merits and demerits
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 that country. Both of them can be consulted and be used in their own
countries
.
For instance
, the railway system in Japan is complimented as the best in the world. If some
students
 study relative major in
Japanese
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 university, they can not only absorb the knowledge but
also
 experience by themselves. In that case, they can bring the improvements to their nation and update the system.
However
, the significant drawbacks should not be neglected. When
students
 study abroad, they may struggle with different social problems.
The plenty
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 of them leave their hometown and
are
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lack
of
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life skills. They have to do all the
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 by themselves even though they may not be trained before.
In addition
, many
students
 are used to
rely
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 on their parents when it comes to law. Theft happens
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 many
countries
, especially to
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foreigners.
The most
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of
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victims from other
countries
 do not be familiar with the local laws. Adding the
language
 barriers, most of them cannot deal with
such
 things well. These drawbacks make the
students
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student's
students'
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 live difficultly. In summary, the advantages and disadvantages should be considered before
students
 choose to acquire degrees from other
countries
.
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