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E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

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It is certainly true that
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email
 has influenced our society a lot, particularly
professional
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 and social communication. While questions have been raised regarding the negative impacts that accompany the
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 of
email
, in my view, these definitely do not outweigh
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 benefits of it. On the one hand,
email
 has made employees busier than they were and has made
people
 more isolated from the world, what
have
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 influenced our society badly. The
first
 reason for
these
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 is that through the emails workers receive new tasks and new messages, and sometimes, they do not have enough
time
 to respond to them all. The
second
 cause is that
people
 tend to spend more
time
 chatting using
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 smartphones, and they feel more comfortable talking with others on their phones, not face to face. In
this
 context, it is worth mentioning that society should spend more
time
 with
people
 around them rather than
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 computers.
On the other hand
, there are more advantages. The major of them
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 that it helps everyone reach their friends and relatives who are not near them, and it provides the opportunity to send messages to many companies in which they want to get a job.
For instance
, my uncle was struggling to find a position, he went to different organisations, and it took lots of
time
.
As a result
, he decided to write to a number of companies online and after a short
time
, he got a response from the company in which he is still working. In conclusion, it can be said that, even though
email
 has made workers work more and
people
 spend lots of
time
 online,these do not outweigh the contributions made by
this
 innovation towards improving
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communication between
people
.
However
, to be successful,
people
 should pay more attention to the world around them.
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