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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
traveling
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 becomes more and more popular around the world by increasing the number of
tourists
 every year and the government pay attention to
this
 industry to improve their economical state. I strongly believe that tourism segment plays important role in every country owing to the fact that it provides development of infostructure and commercial side for these areas.
However
, it could affect natural sites negatively by destroying the beautiful view, and ecology and raising the level of pollution.   These days, people travel to other countries a lot compared to the past, because the tourism sector gains vitality for them each year in order to relax or enjoy their time in holidays.
Hence
, officials try to extend their opportunity to attract more
tourists
 with their money, which will be spent in their area by comprising income for businesses.
For instance
, Almaty is now one of the main cities in Kazakhstan, which populate our country to other nations with its mountains, amusements, and natural places by getting big profits from
tourists
. These conditions could be improved in every city with cultural performances, features and so on.   In the contrast to
this
 fact, the main problem for coming guests from different countries is damaging to the nature of these areas and it could have a negative impact on ecology. The majority of
tourists
 do not take their own responsibilities to protect or care about the beautiful natural places. One successful example is that the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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