Weddings are gretting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

The most controversial issue of
marriage
procedure is how to be carried out and how much budget is needed.
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couples are about to perform as impeccable as possible to create a sustainable memory for themselves and their guests.
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their longings make it so sensitive
which
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we are going to explore
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of
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that and whether it is advantageous or not for society in
this
essay. These days one of the most problematic
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facing
to
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young adults and their families is how to implement wedding
ceremonies
since unlike many years ago personal houses have gotten smaller and don’t have adequate capacity to hold
a crowded gatherings
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thus
, things are left to ceremonial companies and public wedding halls to manage.
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this
occasion, people are racked up with large bills.
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,
the
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must
be pay
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high
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fee even for a simple firework. Definitely, these evolutions have impacted people’s thoughts as well, and tend to perform more royal and bigger than ever with the assumption that as bigger the
ceremonies
are, the more relationship endure.
Although
, trying to have the best party is admirable but
such
beliefs behind it could be really harmful
for
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society considering
as
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a cultural aspect.
For instance
, a boy or
girle
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girl
approaching
marriage
age is expecting to connect with someone without
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crisis.
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moral
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values that have
direct
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effect on
marriage
and mutual relationships are
subtituded
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substituted
with priorities like
prosperty
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property
prosperity
of
spouse
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.
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my best
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knowledge, focusing on
ceremonies
and their expenses is just wasting time and money which must be moderated.
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many people, I believe not only there isn’t any relationship between kind of
ceremonies
with
intimation
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an intimation
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of couples but
also
it can be accompanied by
increase
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in
depression
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the depression
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of poor young adults who are not capable to hold expensive parties. In conclusion, it is better for couples who intend to be married to make a transparent plan and narrow down unnecessary
customes
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customers
customer
to ease the procedure in order to increase
marriage
stats
instead
of depression raise.
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  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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