some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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but few people think that Add an article
an education
now a days
they are not mandatory as people can gain knowledge from the internet. Correct the word
nowadays
However
, I strongly believe that internet
or any other source of technology cannot replace the Correct article usage
the internet
role
of schools in imparting education
.
School plays a very crucial role
in students
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the overall
such
as mental, physical and social . Its curriculum does not only include teaching but other then
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than
this
a student can learn many activities such
as sports , art and craft and music. Multidsciplinary
things are taught in the school by the mentors Correct your spelling
Multidisciplinary
such
as good behaviour, discipline and social bonding. So, this
institution serves in overall
development of kids who are the building blocks of our society and nation.
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the overall
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role
in giving information and knowledge. Its
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would say that none of the technologies can replace the Change the capitalization
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role
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the growth
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psychological
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite