The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compare to the past due to advanced technologies which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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criminal incidents seem declined more than ever. Even supermarkets, streets and grocery stores have

technology

such

as CCTV cameras to record any situations. But it

is disagreed

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that

technologies

can totally prevent

crime

. Analysing the news, that still has violence incidents every single day.

First

, the development of

technologies

assists our life to be savers but it does not mean these able to stop starving people from stealing

a food

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food

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For instance

, a supermarket has the securities cameras around the store and a thief can go inside and grab some mike,

then

walk away. Sadly, these cameras can only record footage but they can not solve crimes.

Therefore

this

expresses how

technologies

can help us but can not stop

crime

Second

, nowadays social network is one of the most famous

technology

, we can create social media group in order to warn people to avoid

area

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the area

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that has a high

crime

rate.

For example

, a Facebook page announced and reported about a nightclub that has sexual harassment in theirs.

This

means the criminal incident already happened.

Thus

technologies

will never solve the

crime

they can only help us to refuse incoming

crime

in the same situation. In conclusion, I recognize

this

current day is better than the past, because of

technology

However

, It looks like we effort to solve the problem at the leaves ,not from the roots,

this

means the

crime

will not

decreased

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cause of

technology

but it will fall down

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individuals.

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