«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

Many people opine that the governments ought to spend
money
on
sports
facilities for the best
sportsmen
and
sportswoman
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. But others think that
this
money
should be spent on simple
athletes
. In my
opinion
, it is normal to have different views, but we should choose one right
opinion
. I think
,
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the ministries should spend
this
money
on ordinary
sportsmen
or sportswomen , for their development and becoming the top
athletes
. According to the
first
opinion
, I think the governments should spend a little
money
not a lot on the best
athletes
.
Money
is necessary to improve facilities for ordinary, beginner
athletes
.
In addition
,
sports
professionals earn too much
money
from competitions ,so they don't need much
money
.
For instance
, football players earn enormous salaries rather to other
sportsmen
.
Next
, according to the
second
opinion
, I opine that for ordinary
sportsmen
and sportswomen the society spends
money
. And they are becoming well-known gradually, the governments had to support
money
as much as they can.
In addition
, I absolutely agree with others who think that society should spend more
money
on beginner
sportsmen
. To conclude, the government ought to spend a lot of
money
on
sports
facilities rather than
another specialty
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. Since
,
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I read in
article
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that only
sports
speciality can quickly make the public well-known and famous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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