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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Nowadays
people
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 tend to eat healthy
food
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 more than fast
food
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, some
people
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 believe that the quality of
food
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 intake in the future will be lower,
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, others don't agree with them. In my way of thinking, I believe the awareness of healthy
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 is recently higher than before.
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 essay will explain why I disagree with the statement ent above. To being with the awareness in small family and the society has grown up compared to before
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 we see a lot of new healthy
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 restaurants rent has open, we hear from time to time a new method of diet or a program and we see
people
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 tend to decrease the sugar intake with their beverages.
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, I will give an example about me and my small circle in the
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 3 years I have heard about Keto and low carb diet
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, I saw many
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 around me follow
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 kind of program and see a good transformation in their health and the level of fitness
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, following a healthy diet help to follow a good fitness level.
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, there is a high percentage
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 still consume unhealthy
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 like frozen, junk
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 and one of the most reason is that their busy life we are living in while keeping a good healthy
food
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 will be challenging for them In conclusion,
people
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 tend to eat high standard these days, and they get good care of their health, and they reward themselves from one time to another with a low standard meal if they are going out with friends.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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