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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness Why is this? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

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It is true that some
people
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 can have some bad feelings when they need to go abroad to work, live or study
in
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for
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long
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 time. In
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 essay, the causes of
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 phenomenon will be analyzed and the solutions to solve
this
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 problem will be provided as well. Some
people
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 think that
people
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 who have to live far from their home can suffer badly
emotion
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emotions
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such
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 as missing their hometown because of the following reason.
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,
people
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 who go abroad to live have to settle down
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 a new
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 that they do not know before.
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, they can feel lonely
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 strangers.
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,
people
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 might miss their family, friends and their old lives.
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 is because everything in
new
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place
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 is not familiar
with
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to
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 them.
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, it is quite hard for them to be
socilized
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socialized
 in
new
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a new
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place
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 immediately. Fortunately, there are some measures that can help
homesick
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the homesick
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 feeling of
people
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 becomes better. The
first
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 solution is that
people
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 should focus on working or studying.
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, they may not have enough time to think about the past when they are busy.
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, if
people
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 have to work
everyday
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, they can feel tired and need to take a rest after a
hard working
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hard-working
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 day.
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, they can not think too much about their family and friends
at
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in
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 their hometown.
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,
people
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 should go
outsite
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outside
 to make a new
relationship
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relationships
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 that can help them feel happier.
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 is because if
people
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 have some new friends and new neighbours
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in
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 a new
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, they may not feel lonely anymore.
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, the bad emotion can be improved. In conclusion, it seems to me that
homesick
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homesickness
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 is the feeling that
people
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 usually have when they go abroad to study, live or work.
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,
people
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 should find some positive ways to address
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 problem to have a better life.
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