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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #price #fuel
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debate over whether the fuel cost hike is the most effective way to tackle
this
 issue. While
this
 statement is valid to some extent, I would contend that it may do more harm than good. On the one hand, hiking up the gas prices is not a sustainable solution as
this
 doesn't deter individuals from moving automobiles.Because people's need to travel
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 sharply, there is currently no alternative energy source for gasoline.
Although
 there is an increase in the price of fuel, people are forced to
use
 and spend more money.
In other words
, they will purchase motor
vehicles
 , which causes carbon emission harmful to the environment.
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, In Viet Nam, Hanoi is one of the cities with alarming air quality.
Consequently
, I think that bringing up gas prices is not an option
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.
On the other hand
, deal with environmental problems, there are more aspirant ways in order to solve environmental problems. Hybrid
vehicles
 are electric
vehicles
 that should be put into
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. because they do not
use
 carbon dioxide.
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, Tesla is a powered
vehicles
 company in the US, In the US, they focus on developing electric
vehicles
 and building power stations on the entire road in the US to encourage people to
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.The government and
resident
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 should
use
 more eco-friendly cars,
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 and lorries which run on renewable energy registered from nature in the future. To conclude, I disagree that making fuel more expensive is the right approach to fight the pollution
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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