Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Today international tourism become something common, and on
this
basis
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many argue about the consequences, of
this
for the
countries
that attract
visitors
. Many say that it destroys the country within itself, while others claim that it is beneficial for the
state
receiving
visitors
. From my point of view, travelling to foreign
countries
has
positive
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a positive
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impact for both sides, for
tourists
and for the
state
such
as cultural exchange, new working places. Nowadays it is the most peaceful, tolerant and developed world that ever existed. In some places, the borders between
countries
disappeared at
all
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, so it has become easier to travel. It has
major
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impact
in
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the current world. People visit other states and bring with them their culture and traditions, in return residents of the
state
that attract
tourists
share their values,
ethnic
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and ethnic
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identities with the foreigners. That way the “cultural exchange”
occur
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. It benefits both
of
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the
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sides, as
tourists
gain new knowledge and experience,
the
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country extends its own cultural diversity and heritage. Other than that, the development of
touristic
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the touristic
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sector in the economy of any nation promotes the growth of the GDP. Most
of
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tourists
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the tourists
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who visit
country
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the country
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stay at hotels, eat at restaurants, use public transport, rest in the special destinations and
visitors
are ready to pay for that services.
Therefore
, tourism creates lots of vocations and job places for the locals.
For example
, the unemployed adult from Paris may invest
into
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the
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camera and offer his services as
photographer
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a photographer
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, because there are many foreigners with cash and without
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camera
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. To conclude, some people might be
sceptic
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a sceptic
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and believe that travel has a negative impact on the
countries
travelled to.
However
, international tourism contributes a major proportion to the culture and economy of the
state
hosting
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by hosting
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visitors
,
by
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cultural exchange and
decreasing
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the decreasing
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unemployment
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rate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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