In their advertising ,busines now-a-days usually emphasis that their products are new in some way Why is this? Do you think it is a poitive or negative development?

Nowadays, some commercials broadcast and focus on
it's
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new
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merchandise
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merchandize
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merchandise
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some
poople
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people
think that it is a
benifit
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benefit
benefits
for our life, but in my point of view,
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I think
it has a negative
influnce
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influence
. People
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born
in
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chasing modern item. If some stars or idols are wearing or using a brand-new
product
, people just want to have the some .
Moreover
, who can reject
to buy
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new stuff? There isn't
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anyone
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any one
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who want
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want
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to be old-fashioned. Business
who
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produces state of the art
product
can lead them
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profits.
Also
, it will help our world
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better.
Such
as the
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of
car
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makes our world more
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convenient
than before. We can
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to
further
place
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because of
new
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product
.
On the other hand
, publishing
new
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product
means that you will use more energy. Plus, you will need to pay for the new things which may
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a waste. Due to the old ones still can
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, but you want to catch the fashion, so you overbuying. That isn't a smart way to purchase.
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but not least, you may have transition
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when you trying to use a new
product
. It will cost you more time and money. In conclusion,
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chasing
new
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product
will feel happiness, stick
on
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old
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an old
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product
is more eco-friendly and
more wide
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choise
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choice
.
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