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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many
people
 choose to live or
work
 in other
countries
, which has been made possible by the comfort of air travel and modern communications. I believe there are more advantages than disadvantages to
this
. There are significant advantages that can facilitate
people
's
lives
.
Firstly
, it means that
people
 have the opportunity to see other parts of the world and see the life of those places.
For example
,
people
 from the West often go to get a job in Asia or the Middle East and visa-versa.
This
 enriches many
people
’s
lives
 as they get to learn about other cultures, languages, traditions and different ways of working in their own country. Despite
this
, the disadvantage of
this
 construction (development) is the distance between family members. If a person leaves, it is true that air travel and applications
such
 as Telegram, and WhatsApp mean that communication and contact can be saved.
However
, it is likely that a person will only be able to return once or twice a year during the holidays, and communication by Telegram, WhatsApp or email is not the same as personal contact.
In addition
 to
this
, it can
also
 bring benefits to other
countries
. If someone moves abroad in search of
work
, it is usually because their skills are required there. To illustrate
this
, architects and scientists often move to
work
 in
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, locations in other
countries
 when there is a shortage, so
this
 is very valuable for the place they are moving to. I would say that while the current trend to live and
work
 abroad has drawbacks,
however
, the benefits outweigh them. It can enrich the
lives
 of
people
 and the
lives
 of
people
 in the
countries
 to which they move.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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