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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

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Increasing average weight is happening in some nations. On the hand, the health and physical abilities of the population are decreased. It is wondered about the roots and how we can solve the problems. There are several causes that create the situation.
This
 essay will substantiate the causes and their solutions in the paragraphs below.
To begin
 with, one possible root is that
people
 tend to consume more unhealthy
food
 especially fast-
food
. It is easier to access detrimental
food
 rather than healthy
food
 due to the time-efficient when we order and the existence of fast-
food
 restaurants everywhere.
For instance
, my niece often goes to KFC because it locates nearby her house.
Secondly
,
people
 avoid doing outdoor activities because of coronavirus pandemics. There is
less
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 physical movement among the crowds.
its
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 affects the health of
people
 and increases the chance of an ailment. To tackle them, the government should do more public advertising about
the
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healthy meals to encourage
people
 to have good behaviour. It should public not only on television but
also
 on social media. The
second
 possible solution is that the government should control the healthy foodstuff prices including ingredients and packages.
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, most
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vegetarian restaurants in Thailand have an average high price per dish than neutral
food
. In a nutshell, the addressed causes and solutions have been mentioned in the above paragraphs. All the solutions should be applied to reduce the risk of sickness among societies due to weight increase. In the future, the percentage of
people
 who take care of themself might be expanded.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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