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Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, almost everything has been done through the
internet
 and many people of different ages
use
 their mobile
phones
.
However
, there is an argument about not using them at school by
teenagers
. I completely agree with
this
 idea for two main reasons.
Firstly
,
teenagers
 are likely to be distracted. They should completely focus on learning while using mobile
phones
 often has a negative impact. They tend to
use
 different social media
such
 as Instagram or TikTok or text their friends rather than listening to their teacher or even doing physical activities. On top of that, many adolescents tend to play online and offline games on their mobiles.
Therefore
, they may lose their concentration by tempted to play, especially online games that can be played in groups, because they can do that with their peers rather than studying during the breaks.
Secondly
, it is important for them to learn to remember things or do research without using the
internet
. Nowadays, many people are dependent on the
internet
 rather than their knowledge, books and their memories. If
teenagers
use
 their mobile
phones
 at school, they tend to find everything through search engines
such
 as Google
instead
 of books and articles. It
also
 can affect their creativity because they do not need to think and find a solution anymore. It lessens the quality of their education,
consequently
, especially because they can easily cheat and get a higher score when they are not well-educated. In conclusion, I totally support that
teenagers
 should not be allowed to
use
 their mobile
phones
 at school because it negatively affects the quality of literacy as well as dependency on the
internet
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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