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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary world, media houses are displaying more negative news over the
positve
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positive
 one. According to a few,
such
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 causes detrimental effects on humans as well as society. I agree that a plethora of disturbing news can spread negativity and individuals may remain unaware of the positive growth. In
this
 modern time, viewers of TV channels may feel depressed by continuously watching disturbing information. To gain more television rating points, channels are
manily
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mainly
 concentrating on the facts about difficulties or hard times that human beings are facing which can disturb the mindset of individuals.
For instance
,
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 the majority of broadcasters are broadcasting disturbing visuals of the Russia-
Ukrain
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Ukraine
 war.
Hence
,
once
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one
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 can cultivate the feeling of insecurity by repeatedly watching negative reports.
Furthermore
, individuals
remains
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 unaware
about
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 the positive growth that nation is doing. The regime is
acomplishing
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accomplishing
 plenty of projects which are not only required to be known by their citizens but will
also
 make them proud
on
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 their government. To illustrate, very a few media houses have publicised the information about
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innogration
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integration
 of the express highway in Rajasthan, an Indian state, which can be used as a runway for fighter jets as well during the
war time
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.
Thus
, I think showing
positve
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positive
 news can benefit
in
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surging the
moral
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morale
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 of society. To conclude, a trend of showing facts about humanitarian challenges and crises has elevated in
the
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recent time. Along with others, I agree that it has
devastating
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 impact on
public
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the public
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 and
community
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. I believe that broadcasters should play
vital
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 role
about
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 deciding on what to broadcast and at what intensity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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