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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Nowadays,
the
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technology was developed over the period which made
people
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 more convenient by creating websites, applications, and online platforms.
In contrast
, many
people
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concern
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 that the old tradition like reading books or newspapers will disappear because
people
 will get
information
 by using online platforms
instead
. In my perspective, there
are
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 2 main
reason
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 that I agree that using
book
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 and
newspaper
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newspapers
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 will slightly disappear.
Firstly
, the online
platform
 was more
time consuming
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. So if you only search it on
internet
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 you will
got
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 the
information
 you want which is much faster than
find
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 the topic in the newspaper or even
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 it in
the
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book
.
For
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 you are interested in Thomas Eddison and you want to know his history. I believe that most
of
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people
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 will just
searching
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 it on google which is the easiest way to get
information
 but if you want to get the
information
 by reading the
book
 you should find the
book
 that
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specific
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 topic.
Secondly
, the online
platform
have
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 some videos and motion things which I think
its
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make viewer can understand easily because some
people
 don't want to read.
For example
, I believe that there are many
of
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people
 that hate reading a novel or
the
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 thick
book
 so you can watch
the
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motion video or movies
instead
. In conclusion, I think that in the future
noone
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no one
no-one
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the
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book
 or newspaper and
using
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use
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online
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an online
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platform
instead
 because of
these 2 reason
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 which were the online
platform
 was more time consuming and have some video. So I think that in the future most
of
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the
people
 will
take
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 a choice that
make
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 their life easier which is using
online
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an online
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platform
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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