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The cost of public transport is increasing. Why? Solutions?

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Introduction
It is generally acknowledged that the
fare
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 of public
transportation
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 is
raising
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rising
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.
This
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 essay outline why the price is going up and
suggest
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 possible solutions which should be taken into consideration.
Body paragraph 1
To
begine
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begin
 with, the most significant reason
of
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for
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 an expensive public
vehicles'
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vehicles
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fare
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fares
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 is owing to a lack of resources. Since public
transportation
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such
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 as buses and trains need fossil
fuels
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 to operate, the shortage of these resources makes the price of them become costless.
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, recent media in Korea reports that
increment
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 of fossil
fuels
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 that were exported by other countries plays a key factor in increasing the
fare
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 of
transportation
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. As the example clearly illustrates, the limited resources should be a matter of
expensive
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the expensive
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 fees
of
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for
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 public vehicles.
Moreover
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, as the population has increased, the number of commuters has
also
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 grown.
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, decrepit transport infrastructures need renovation which is cannot
covered
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 with only state funds.
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, governments manipulate commuters to pay more taxes on public
transportation
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.
Body paragraph 2
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, it is not all doom and gloom as there are some methods to handle
this
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 situation.
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,
government
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the government
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 should allocate state funds to
development
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the development
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 of efficient and reusable energy
such
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 as solar power and wind power.
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, a survey conducted by the Korea
Transportation
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 Foundation has revealed that after the Korean government implemented electronic buses, the bus fees
have
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decreased.
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, using other affordable energy
instead
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 of fossil
fuels
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 is an efficient means of reducing the price of public
transportation
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.
Secondly
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, when governments encourage citizens to use public vehicles more than private cars, users can divide the burden of fees in
renovation
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the renovation
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 of
tranport
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transport
infastructures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
.
Hence
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,
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recommendation
recommendations
recommentation
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the recommentation
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 of using public
transportation
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 is essential.
Conclusion
In conclusion, due to the lack of fossil
fuels
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 and
development
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the development
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 of public transport systems, the public traffic
fare
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 is increasing.
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, governments should spend state funds on developing reusable energy and encourage
dewellers
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dwellers
jewellers
 to use public
transportation
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 often.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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