You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
From the past to the present, there was an adaption of cultures in many societies which sometimes
it
is the combination Correct pronoun usage
apply
or
disappearance Correct your spelling
of
by
cutting-edge Change preposition
of
technology
. Additionally
, some cultures was
Change the verb form
were
elimated
and changed by the internet. I agree that development in Correct your spelling
eliminated
technology
led to traditional lifestyle extinction
. My ideas and perspective will be provided in ths
essay.
Correct your spelling
this
the
Firstly
, the technology
development caused the original behaviour Replace the word
technological
changing
. Change the verb form
to change
For instance
, in Thialand
, in the past, Correct your spelling
Thailand
people
have some tradition
and Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
ritual
about Fix the agreement mistake
rituals
respect
the river which Wrong verb form
respecting
called
Loy Krathong, Add a missing verb
is called
thai
Correct your spelling
that
people
will put some beautiful creation
Fix the agreement mistake
creations
float
in the river. Replace the word
floating
As a result
, this
ritual caused the
Correct article usage
apply
water
pollution because there was a tonne of waste in the water
. Correct your spelling
These
There
days, the internet Correct your spelling
These
encourage
Change the verb form
encourages
people
to recognize the effect of this
ceremony
, as a consequence, a
number of participants reduces dramatically. Change the article
the
Therefore
, cutting-edge invention
led Fix the agreement mistake
inventions
some
traditional Change preposition
to some
culture
Replace the word
cultural
extinction
.
Secondly
, the
Correct article usage
apply
technology
development contibutes
Correct your spelling
contributes
adaptation
in Change preposition
to adaptation
traditional
Add an article
a traditional
the traditional
ceremony
. Fix the agreement mistake
ceremonies
For example
, in the past, Songkran
festival is Correct article usage
the Songkran
the
Correct article usage
a
holidays
Fix the agreement mistake
holiday
which
citizens have to play with Change preposition
in which
water
, most of them use
Wrong verb form
used
bowl
to play Add an article
a bowl
the bowl
water
, Change preposition
with water
conversely
, nowadays, people
have a
gun Remove the article
apply
water
which can put the pressure Change preposition
with water
for
increase Change preposition
on
distance
. Correct article usage
the distance
As a result
, there was very fun to adapt
Correct your spelling
adopt
technology
with
the Change preposition
to
ceremony
. Thus
, traditional culture is changed by new innovation
.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
innovations
technology
disturbs the
some ritual process Remove the article
apply
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
cause
the Change the verb form
causes
extinction
and differentiation in ceremony
. I definitely agree that Add an article
the ceremony
technology
affect
culture inevitably. In prediction, there was Change the verb form
affects
many
Replace the quantifier
much
extinction
of the traditional ceremony
, to prevent this
issues, Correct determiner usage
these
goverments
and individuals need to maintain the objective of it. Correct your spelling
governments
government
On the other hand
, some action
affect Fix the agreement mistake
actions
environmental
Add an article
the environmental
problem
, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
therefore
we need to change the traditional process or having
some creative ideas to deal with Wrong verb form
have
this
problem.Submitted by kavinpob on
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