You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

From the past to the present, there was an adaption of cultures in many societies which sometimes

it

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apply

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is the combination

or

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of

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disappearance

by

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of

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cutting-edge

technology

.

Additionally

, some cultures

was

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were

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elimated

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eliminated

and changed by the internet. I agree that development in

technology

led to traditional lifestyle

extinction

. My ideas and perspective will be provided in

ths

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this

the

essay.

Firstly

, the

technology

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technological

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development caused the original behaviour

changing

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to change

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.

For instance

, in

Thialand

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Thailand

, in the past,

people

have some

tradition

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traditions

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and

ritual

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rituals

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about

respect

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respecting

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the river which

called

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is called

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Loy Krathong,

thai

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that

people

will put some beautiful

creation

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creations

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float

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floating

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in the river.

As a result

,

this

ritual caused

the

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apply

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water

pollution because there was a tonne of waste in the

water

.

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These

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There

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These

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days, the internet

encourage

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encourages

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people

to recognize the effect of

this

ceremony

, as a consequence,

a

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the

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number of participants reduces dramatically.

Therefore

, cutting-edge

invention

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inventions

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led

some

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to some

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traditional

culture

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cultural

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extinction

.

Secondly

,

the

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apply

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technology

development

contibutes

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contributes

adaptation

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to adaptation

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in

traditional

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a traditional

the traditional

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ceremony

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ceremonies

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.

For example

, in the past,

Songkran

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the Songkran

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festival is

the

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a

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holidays

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holiday

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which

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in which

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citizens have to play with

water

, most of them

use

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used

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bowl

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a bowl

the bowl

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to play

water

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with water

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,

conversely

, nowadays,

people

have

a

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apply

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gun

water

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with water

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which can put the pressure

for

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on

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increase

distance

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the distance

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.

As a result

, there was very fun to

adapt

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adopt

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technology

with

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to

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the

ceremony

.

Thus

, traditional culture is changed by new

innovation

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innovations

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. In conclusion,

technology

disturbs

the

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apply

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some ritual process

which

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that

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cause

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causes

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the

extinction

and differentiation in

ceremony

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the ceremony

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. I definitely agree that

technology

affect

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affects

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culture inevitably. In prediction, there was

many

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much

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extinction

of the traditional

ceremony

, to prevent

this

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these

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issues,

goverments

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governments

government

and individuals need to maintain the objective of it.

On the other hand

, some

action

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actions

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affect

environmental

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the environmental

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problem

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problems

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,

therefore

we need to change the traditional process or

having

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have

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some creative ideas to deal with

this

problem.