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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? Why is the case? What can be done about this problem

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Nowadays
people
 have done lots of significant developments in
variety
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 of areas
especially
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 agriculture. Due to some reasons, lack of food and
people
 who
is
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 still going hungry can be seen around the world, despite all of the improvements that have been done in
this
 particular field.
Firstly
, I believe one of the reasons is the existence of a huge gap
of
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 development between
countries
 which can be regarded as a reason
of
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 many problems
especially
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 in
this
 case. I assume that some
countries
 have the ability to provide
their
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 needs by agriculture improvements whether they really need it or not,
on the other
hand
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 there are lots of
people
 who are facing vital issues and as a poor
country
 they can't meet their needs so they need these kinds of developments.
Secondly
, the prices are higher than usual.
Although
 These developments usually are provided in
the
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rich
countries
, you can not make the assumption that all of the entire
people
 who are living in
this
country
 are rich and they may have problems with using a big part of their budget on
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stuff
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stuffs
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 like
this
. Despite the fact that diversity between
countries
 is high, if each of these rich
countries
take
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 a step forward
for
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 a better future, everything will be fine. In my opinion, we should begin with prices because when the governments lower the prices, it will be great for themselves as a nation and the facilities can be used by almost all of the
people
 in the
country
 itself and at the same time it will be easier for other
countries
 to afford the agriculture stuff and bring it to their
country
 so that the percentage of the starving
people
 around the world will be much lower which is a considerable improvement. In conclusion, there are many
people
 around the world who does not have the ability to meet their needs as a human and it can be
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a result of many reasons, but I assume that if we put these solutions that I mentioned into action, it will be significantly better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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