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The graph illustrates the data over a period of two years on the works
about
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 humanities and social sciences
disciplines
. According to the chart, English related careers
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 the most popular among 5 jobs, while the others had some variations in the figures. There was a steady decrease in the
numbers
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 of
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English related jobs, falling from 1200 in 2012 to nearly 900 in 2014,
although
 it remained the most popular work during the whole period. Quantities of people who worked in history showed a slight fall over the two year period, from just over 700 to under 600.
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Furthermore
, the graph of philosophy
disciplines
 represented a fluctuation, but
finally
 showed a downward trend, in which the number of employees reduced from slightly more than 700 to 600.
In contrast
, there was a gradual growth of the workers who had jobs in
communication
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 area, which had an increase of approximately 200. The least popular career was sociology
disciplines
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, which remained the lowest number of careers between 2012 and 2014, from nearly 500 to 600. Overall, the data suggest that philosophy would be the career
that is
 most unstable, and
disciplines
 of communication would increase in the future graph.
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