IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
Environmental hazards are defined as extreme events or substances in the Earth and its ecological system that may cause adverse consequences for humans and things they value. These include geophysical and meteorological phenomena
such
 as earthquakes and droughts. Approaches to environmental hazards developed from an initial focus on preventing natural disasters through engineering works
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 to an emphasis on how human
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
 and perceptions influence response and adjustment to hazards, and
then
 to analyses of how political and economic processes and structures make some people and places more vulnerable to extreme events than others. Environmental risks are often defined as the product of a hazard and the likelihood of its occurring, using a simple formula that defines
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
risk
as
Add the preposition
toas
show examples
 the product of
probability
Add an article
the probability
show examples
 of an event, and its severity measured in terms of the population exposed, and the nature of the consequences. Environmental
risk
 assessment employs a wide range of experimental, statistical, and economic techniques to estimate and compare risks from pollution, technologies, and everyday activities. Critical perspectives on
risk
 point to the limitations of quantitative assessments, including the differences between public and ‘expert’ judgments, the unequal distribution of
risk
 exposure in space and society, and
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the ways in which risks are constructed and defined by different interest groups.
Submitted by 397717457 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: