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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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It is commonplace to see governments around the world spending billions of dollars on
education
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. Whereas some people argue that everyone should have access to all levels
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education
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, I argue that it is counter-productive and jeopardise the development of other
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 with, free
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 cultivates a variety of talents to address the needs of
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society
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 is because everyone, regardless of their financial ability, will gain an opportunity to hone their skills and become a useful
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 of
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society
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, there will be more
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 doctors to carry out surgeries and lawyers to fight against injustice.
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 will ultimately benefit
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society
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 as a whole.
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, the country will become more competitive on the world stage. Since there is a larger pool of talents, it
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 much easier to achieve breakthroughs in various
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 like science, medical and military, and become leaders in these fields.
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, I believe that many students will feel less motivated to study. As compared to paying their school fees directly where individuals understand that the
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 they receive does not come easy, students may not aware that the free
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 system is ultimately funded through a complicated tax system, and they end up taking the valuable
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 opportunity for granted. On top of that, free
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 could be a success at the expense of other
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’ development. Considering that the cost of providing free
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 for all is an astronomical figure, governments will have to limit the expenditure on other
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 to support the free
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 system.
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, equally important
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 like transport and housing will be sacrificed. In conclusion,
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 free
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 makes the country more competitive and equips the
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 with experts to accommodate the needs of the public, it is an unwise approach because it thrives at the expense of other important
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 and students may become less motivated to work hard.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible
  • economic backgrounds
  • primary school
  • tertiary education
  • free education
  • fundamental right
  • social mobility
  • economic mobility
  • reduce inequality
  • financial barriers
  • educational opportunities
  • government funding
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